[DeathNTaxes]

You know you might think about using complete sentences and maybe even fully enunciate the words you use.

[ZachD009]

Thanks for the input guys, i do appreciate it.

Its hard to try to be original and not be too mainstream or too "out there" i gotta agree must most of you. Lyrics have always been my downfall, im better at beats.

[Soma]

Originally Posted by DeathNTaxes

If you want to be a skillful rapper.

Learn how to write real poetry.

Rap is not poetry.

Learn what meter is, and how to use other rhymes instead of just being linguistically lazy and using blending and shit to get words to rhyme. End rhyme is out played there is so much more English has to offer that the ignorance of the undereducated prevents from being exploited.

QFT.

I like your beats, the instruments, and the overall sound. Really like that second track. However, your tracks in their present form...I don't believe will be a big seller. They have a lot of potential though. If you do as Death said and learn to write real Poetry and incorporate that into your rap your shit would be tight as fuck and on a level above all the other mc's out there.

[ZachD009]

ive gone through and read it all, and im more than appreciative for checkin it out. Thanks

But like the most common thing ive heard is generic rhymes? honestly (and im not beinga smart ass) is what im saying different from the shit on the radio?? i mena, yeah there better than me, (obv) but the shit i say is what sells

The best rappers (IMO) are the ones who are underground (atmosphere, kweli etc.)

I guess im just tryin tomake a name for myself, like i said, i never expect to be famou, i just love it as a hobby... thanks for the input, neg or pos i do appreciate it

[erskine777]

ahh, dude, you're only in it for the money? A lot of the mainstream guys are douchebags; they only sing about partying, fucking, and pretending to be "gangsters". This results in the death of HER, like common's song. The underground rappers are the real emcees, since they're doing it because they love it, not for the money. Underground is where all the real talent is. I guarantee that Juice, Canibus, or Supernatural could destroy any mainstream in a freestyle battle. Immortal Technique and Aesop Rock have read more books in the past month than the entire G Unit crew and Souljah Boy's entourage have seen in their lifetime. They could rap circles around them.

If you want to limit not only your songs, but you yourself as an artist, then by all means stoop to commercialism and pursue mainstream rapping.