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Old 04-20-2008, 01:10 AM   #7 (permalink)
Sudoraba
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I mean this constructively but I found the writing style to be rather clunky. As a US based english speaker I know that there can be different word usages in New Zealand of course. However a lot of the sentences there definitely raised an eyebrow...

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In reality Schilt has nothing more to prove as he has beaten pretty much everyone who was supposed to be a tomb raider of his success. With every passing day it gets brighter, where he has come to an acropolis of his career.
That definitely doesn't seem like the correct usage of acropolis, or tomb raider for that manner. There are other grammarical stuff that I would point out but that stuck in my mind the most.

Anyway just wanted to add a bit of constructive criticism.
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